My essay feedback this time makes me feel a lot better than last time. The larger change that I need to make is expanding on more general religious ideas like the “experience of God” and getting rid of some of the regular events that occur at Northstar that are towards the end of my essay. I feel that my feedback was extremely helpful and it was encouraging to know that although my essay has a lot of material, it is interesting to read. The minor things I need to consider editing are the usage of the terms worship and music (in my paper now I believe I use them interchangeably which I need to fix) as well as calling God “God” and not “He” (due to my larger audience).
For my initiating action assignment, I am still waiting on Cody (the worship leader) to get back to me about what he thinks could improve and how it could be initiated at Northstar or within the religious community. If he still thinks it is an issue like before, I am highly considering initiating other ways to reach out the community and get them involved.
The next few days are pretty big for me. Today is GAMEDAY and I’m really pumped to hopefully kill Maryland. First I have to get through my Chemistry test though : ( Saturday we have a meet against Clemson which is gonna be huge. We beat them last year at ACC’s but it was close and they have a really strong team. My mom is coming to watch so I will spend Saturday and Sunday with her.
Counting down the days until THANKSGIVING!
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