Feedback from a Classmate

I thought that the feedback letter was extremely helpful. What I learned from it is that my audience and purpose is clear. The editor labeled that the purpose was to target students to try and get involved in the Northstar community. The audience stated was VT students, however my intended audience is anyone interested in attending and becoming involved and does include, but is not strictly limited to VT students.

Ben thought that my paragraphs on the food and music were good because a college aged student would be interested in these aspects of the church and service. As far as breaking down lyrics from worship songs, he said it was not necessary.

I need to talk more about the main message and describe the worship session on a more personal level.

Finally, it may be beneficial to omit the paragraphs on weekly announcements and offering because they aren't supportive to the purpose.